• MrSebSinOPM
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    11 days ago

    Don’t mind, appreciate the feedback. Still honing my writing skills ;)

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      11 days ago

      Then draw a circle around the plant’s utterance in panel 3, and also around the first half of the plant’s utterance in panel 4, and consider if those parts could have been something else. Not that they’re bad, just that the rest of the strip is excellent and those parts didn’t keep up.